Package Description:

MBA essays don't fail because applicants lack good stories. They fail because the stories don't land: too vague, too polished, too generic to belong to one specific person. This package is for applicants who want expert eyes on every draft, not just high-level direction. ** Before you book, send me your current drafts through the Leland message thread. A quick look at where you are tells me exactly how many hours your essays need and means every hour you commit actually moves you forward. I'll confirm the right package size — and whether I have availability — before you purchase. ** From there, the work happens in two passes: ✍️ Pass 1: Paragraph by Paragraph — I read your draft the way AdCom does: looking for throughline, story selection, and whether the specific details are doing the work you think they are. You'll get full written annotations on every paragraph — what's landing, what's losing the reader, and where the real story is buried underneath the version you submitted. Where something needs a rewrite, I'll show you one, with notes explaining every change so you understand the reasoning, not just the result. 🔍 Pass 2: Line by Line — Once the structure and story feel right after my paragraph by paragraph revision, I get surgical. I start to hedge words, replace passive constructions with owned agency, and find the generic phrases in an otherwise strong paragraph and replace it with something that could only belong to you. On timing: plan for roughly one hour per essay, though the actual time varies. Early or rough drafts, GSB WMM essays, and applications with cross-essay coherence issues tend to run longer. Late-stage drafts, strong short-answer responses, and second or third iterations of the same essay tend to move faster. When you send me your drafts upfront, I'll give you an honest read on scope. If we finish and there's time left in your block, it carries back to you. Choose the package that fits where you are: ⏱️ 3 hours: Right for 2–3 essays at a late stage that are structurally strong and need a precision pass. Best for applicants who are close and need expert eyes, not a rebuild. ⏱️ 5 hours: A full essay set at mid-draft stage with room for one round of iteration on the essay that needs it most. Covers the typical core set for one school with additional essays or several schools with tighter sets. ⏱️ 8 hours: For more complex sets, earlier drafts that need structural work before polish, or applicants working across multiple schools with additional essays at varying stages. ⏱️ 10 hours: For applicants doing serious multi-school work, multiple rounds of revision, or coming in at an early draft stage where story development and structural intervention happen before line-level work begins. What you can expect from me: ✨ 48–72 hour turnaround on all materials (often faster) ✨ Async delivery via Leland messaging, no back and forth scheduling for live sessions required (although I am also happy to use some of your hours to chat live!) ✨ Deliberately small client roster so your drafts get real, focused attention ✨ Honest feedback that makes your application materially stronger, not just cleaner